I need your help. Yet again.

So for my end of year show, the design team (myself and 3 others) are producing a catalogue to illustrate individuals work, and I have placed two up for your opinions of which text you prefer
the look of, or what I perhaps should change. I have had a little trouble because, what I do is very broad, involving photography, styling, make-up, graphics, illustration, and to show my skills on an A5 is a little tricky.

Oh ps, they are practically the same, but its the text that is bugging me...

So your comments please. much love. x